Rise of the Spider Goddess
“She hoped they would be able to find the spell they were looking for. Or perhaps Pynne and Jenn would find it. At least they had gotten away, she thought to herself. Then she turned back to look at the priest who knelt beside her.
“I’m sorry about this, I really am. But you shouldn’t have come here.” The priest grabbed Galadrion’s hair and wrenched her head back. Making a clucking noise with his tongue, he brought the knife up under her chin.
“Maybe you’re right,” Galadrion said quietly..., closing her eyes.
Then he drew the blade across her throat.
The priest’s eyes widened, seeing that his knife had no effect. Galadrion reached up and grabbed him by the front of his cloak. Then he was hurled through the air and crashed against the altar. The knife clattered to the ground.
Oh sure, I could have written, “Galadrion hurled him through the air.” But why use active voice for an action scene when I can use passive voice and make it 158% less exciting?MoreLess
“I’m sorry about this, I really am. But you shouldn’t have come here.” The priest grabbed Galadrion’s hair and wrenched her head back. Making a clucking noise with his tongue, he brought the knife up under her chin.
“Maybe you’re right,” Galadrion said quietly..., closing her eyes.
Then he drew the blade across her throat.
The priest’s eyes widened, seeing that his knife had no effect. Galadrion reached up and grabbed him by the front of his cloak. Then he was hurled through the air and crashed against the altar. The knife clattered to the ground.
Oh sure, I could have written, “Galadrion hurled him through the air.” But why use active voice for an action scene when I can use passive voice and make it 158% less exciting?MoreLess
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